This is my first story posted to any forum, so any comments, critiques, ratings, or requests are very much appreciated.
Ivy flies to the mansion unsure if she would find what she needed. She puts up a telepathic block to stop prying minds. She heads to the main office, she knows they are in there having a meeting, not expecting, smirking she enters. Logan stands, ready to fight. She sees that Wolverine is more handsome than she imagined, something about the wild look in his eyes as he bares his claws and looks down her body, her long blonde hair hanging down, her short stature clocking in at 5'1", 36B breasts, cute round ass, and young face with soft kissable lips. A tight t-shirt, tight pants (like leggings), and simple flats being her attire. "Who are you?" Logan growls, baring his teeth. Ivy lands lightly, his gaze following her. "My name is Ivy. I'm not here to attack you. I need your help," softly these words come out of her mouth, she finishes with a pleading look in her eyes, making sure to make eye contact with Logan. The Prof. looks worried, "I cannot read her mind, something is blocking my telepathy," sternly he looks to Ivy, "What is it?" "I'm sorry that's me. I'm not comfortable with having my mind read. I'll remove the block.. now." And she does remove the block. "You're telepathic?" Prof. X asks. "Yes, I need to find out what I am," Ivy's tone becomes even more urgent. "Aren't you a mutant?" the Prof. asks. Ivy had been facing Logan, standing in between him and the Prof.'s desk. She now turns to face the Prof. and turns her back to Logan. He had now sat down so he was eye level with her lower back and could see that her shirt had a low back so the back of her bra was showing. "No, maybe, I don't know. That's why I'm here," she says, confusedly. While she says this she unhooks her bra using telekinesis, aware Logan was watching. "It's late," Prof. says, "Logan, please show her to an open room and we will discuss this in the morning." Logan gets up to leave and she hooks her bra before turning to leave. Wolverine then leads her down a hallway and opens the door to a bedroom. He enters and Ivy follows, closing the door behind her. "What the hell was that!?" He demands. She walks towards the bed before answering, "What was what?" He aggressively walks to her and bares the claws on his right hand. "Your little spectacle out there!" "Oh, that. Did you like it?" She begins to undress while speaking. "What are you doing, now?" Once completely nude she walks to him, standing only an inch away. "Getting ready for bed, love." He had an obvious boner and Ivy definitely noticed. She stands on her toes and lightly kisses him. Logan groans and retracts his claws. His hands grab her ass and lifts her up. She then puts her legs around his waist. "So you did like it," she remarks with a smirk before kissing him much deeper this time. He throws her down on the bed and takes off his jacket. "Let me help," she suggests and uses telekinesis to unbutton his shirt and his jeans. Logan takes them off exposing his abs and at least 8 in. boner. Ivy looks surprised before spreading her legs, showing him her dripping wet pussy. Instead of penetrating her as she wanted he plays with her pussy, spreading apart her lips and sticking one finger in. "Please, please put it in me..." she begs. "You sure?" it was now his turn to tease. "Yes, yes, please..." Logan gives in and slowly puts his rock hard cock into her. Ivy moans out of pleasure and relief. Logan takes this as a cue and goes faster. "Uh, uh, umm, uh, yes, thank you!" Ivy manages to get out while struggling to breathe evenly. Logan goes even faster and Ivy can barely talk, only moan and gasp. "Uh, uh, uhhh.... mmmm..." This continues until he can feel her cumming on his cock. He pumps twice more before flipping her over and doing her doggy-style. Pumping just as fast. Ivy has to bite a pillow to stop from screaming out of pleasure. His long thick cock stretching her tight pussy. Logan is occasionally groaning deep, in fact if sounded more like a growl. "I'm going to cum," he growls between gasps. And cum he did, at the same time as Ivy, shooting the warm fluid deep inside her. With one last growl Logan pulls out. Ivy then sits up on her knees and licks his cock clean. She then kisses him deep with tongue before standing up and heading to the adjacent bathroom. Logan stands there dumbfounded at what had just transpired and still breathing heavily. After a couple of minutes he hears the water start running. And with a smile he walks into the bathroom after Ivy.
I can tell you without reading a word there's a couple of things you need to fix.
Paragraphs: without paragraph breaks it's just a walk of text, and nobody wants to wade through that.
Dialogue: new speakers generate new paragraphs, see above.
Space between paragraphs: I got roasted on this a couple of times. Trust me, it makes the story much more readable- especially in the default color scheme.
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Paragraphs: without paragraph breaks it's just a walk of text, and nobody wants to wade through that.
Dialogue: new speakers generate new paragraphs, see above.
Space between paragraphs: I got roasted on this a couple of times. Trust me, it makes the story much more readable- especially in the default color scheme.