Birds of a Feather, Chapter One (more than just friends)
It was March, the weather was warming and in my part of the country, we were having some really nice days. It was 4:30 on a Friday afternoon, the weekend started in thirty minutes and I should have been in a great mood. Instead, I was in kind of a piss-off mood, it had been one of those Murphy’s Law Days, if it could go wrong it did go wrong. Nothing you could put your finger on, just a shitty all day.
I was finally finishing up on my last report of the day when I heard a little knock at my office door. I looked up to see Kathy Spears standing at the door looking like she had just lost her best friend. I motioned for her to come in.
She said, “Frank, I’m sorry to bother you but I need a big favor. “My cars in the shop, they were supposed to have it ready by the time of got off work. The Shop Forman just called and told me they found some other things wrong and it will be Monday before it’ll be ready and I don’t have a way home or back to work on Monday. I know it’s a little out of your way but if you could take me home today and give me a ride back Monday I’ll gladly pay you,”
Kathy had been one of my work buddy’s before I was promoted to supervisor and she was promoted to floor manager in another department I didn‘t ask the obvious question, why her husband Jerry couldn’t pick her up and as far as paying me, she wouldn’t pay me what I would really love to have.
Kathy only stood about 5’ 3”, jet black hair, dark brown eyes, about a 36 C bust leading down to a slender waist then out to about a 34“ set of hips with junk in the trunk that most women would kill for. She was part Native American and had the high cheekbones and a completion that always looked like she had just stepped out of a tanning bed.
Kathy said, “Thanks Frank, I’ll go check out and meet you in the parking lot” I finished my report and headed out. As I walked outside Kathy and two other old work buddies of ours, Cindy and Beth, were standing just outside the door. Both girls come over and give me a hug and Cindy said, “Thanks a lot for helping Kathy. It’s been somewhat tough for her lately, then this shit with the car. You’re a good man Frank and we still love you.” “I love you girls too”, I knew we were all talking about a work buddy kind of love.
Kathy and I got in my car and as I was pulling out of the lot, I glanced over at her and noticed that she looked very tired and stressed. This was defiantly out of character for her; she was always upbeat, full of joy. I thought to myself “must have been a bad for her also.”
We were both very quite while I was in heavy commuter traffic. When I got out on the open road with almost no traffic, I fucked up and ask the big question. “So Kathy, with the car problems why didn’t Jerry pick you up, he comes right by the plant?” When she didn’t answer, I glanced over at her to see big tears rolling down her cheeks.
I ask “Damn Girl, what the hell’s wrong. She covered her face with her hands and really broke down crying. I pulled to the shoulder of the road, leaned over, and put my arms around her. She turned, put her arms around my neck and with her head on my shoulder just really let go. She tried sever time to talk but couldn’t for the crying
I told her “easy girl, just cry it out, we got nothing but time,” After several minutes she gain enough control to start talking. “Jerry left me Frank; he’s been gone almost a month now. I called but he won’t even talk to me. Cindy and Beth told me to just let his ass go, that he was a dumb ass and I would be better of without him but I don’t want to be alone.”
I could really relate to being alone, I had been separated for almost a year now and my only sex partners were mostly the five sisters of my right hand.
I ask “what’s the problem, another woman, money problems, WHAT?” She started crying again and I just held her until she calmed down. She pulled her head back and looked me straight in the eyes. I could tell she was rolling all this over in her mind. Then she said “Frank, we’ve known each other and been work place friends for a long time. Do you think of me as a whore, a slut or a nymphomaniac?” Before I could stop myself I said “HELL NO, but I sure would like too.”
She just stared at me for a few seconds and I stared back with what I know was a stupid “OH SHIT, I FUCKED UP” look on my face. At first, she just smiled a little then busted out laughing, through her arms around my neck and hugged me tight. “Frank, you’re the greatest, this is the first time I have laughed since that asshole left me and I’ve been feeling so guilty.”
I ask “So what in the hell’s going on here.” She gives me that deep in your eyes look again and said, “I know you’re a man and I’m a woman but we are friends, work place buddies, RIGHT?” I thought for a second then said, “Let’s say we are asshole buddies, I’m the asshole and you’re the buddy.”
We both laughed, and then she got a serious look on her face. “Frank, I’ve talk with Cindy and Beth about this and I told you what they said. It’s hard talking to anyone about my problem but especially a man.”
“Look Kathy, I don’t know what’s on your mind, all I can tell you is you’re not talking to a man, you’re talking to a friend. A friend who’ll listen, try to answer any question you ask to the best of my ability and none of it goes any further then this car.”
She set for a few seconds as though she was getting her thoughts together. She quickly covered her early years, her and Jerry dating in school, it was first time sex for both of them and they were married just after hi school.
After they were married she found out Jerry didn’t want kids and she did. She found she really liked sex and wanted to explore and try new and different things. Jerry was satisfied with missionary once or twice a week. When she tried to talk with him, he would tell her that was nasty, there was something wrong with her and he wouldn’t talk about it.
I ask her “what did you want that upset him so much.” She blushed a bright red but didn’t answer. “Kathy, my wife left me almost a year ago because she said I was a sex addict and a pervert so what ever it is, it’s not going to shock me. So, from the buddy to the asshole, tell me one thing that was upsetting him.
She set with her head down for a second then in almost a whisper she said “oral sex,” I heard but I ask, “I’m sorry, what did you say?” “ORAL SEXY, DAME IT, ORAL SEX.” I thought for just a second and decided to go for broke, I ask, “you mean like blow-jobs, sucking his cock until he cums in your mouth, eating your pussy until you reach several orgasms. Is that what you are talking about?”
She was very quite for a few seconds then looked over at me, still blushing but smiling she said “YES and you’re a dirty old man.” “Well, that is about half true, dirty mind if you want to call it that but I’m only about two years older than you.”
I ask, “What else did you have on your mind that was causing these asshole problems.” You name it and I thought about it and tried to talk with him about it. I smiled and said “Honey if I start naming it you would really be blushing and probably slap my face.
Kathy set thinking for about a minute the told me “OK Mr. Pervert, lets try this, I’m really having trouble talking about all the things that go through my mind. How about you describe it and I’ll tell you if it is something I have thought of or not.”
I told Kathy it was a deal but if I started being too far out tell me and I would stop, that I would use Jerry as the object of your lust. I’m not gonna mix words so it may get a little vulgar. She nodded and I started “you want to lick his balls and suck his cock until he cums on your tits, on your face, in your mouth.
Kathy was blushing a bright red and breathing heavy but she nodded and whispered “yes” She looked over at me and started laughing. I give her a questing look and she nodded toward my crotch. I looked down to see my bulging cock pushing against my pants.
I laughed and blushed a little myself “you said it, a fucking pervert and I love it. She told me to continue. “Okay, on to you, have him suck your tits and bit on your hard nipples” I heard Kathy let out a little sigh. I knew I was headed in the right direction “massage your clit and finger fuck you while he lick his way down to your hot, wet pussy, continue fingering you while he licks and sucks your clit until you cum.” She was nodding her head as I described each move and I could see she was getting turned on as she thought about it.
I continued, “He continues to finger fuck you as he raises your legs and licks his tongue across your asshole.” I heard Kathy take a deep breath and I looked over to see her staring back at me with a surprised look on her face. I thought “Oh shit, too much information “
Kathy ask “ah, ah you, you would do that to, ah, oh my.” I could feel my cock getting even harder as I told her “if given the chance, HELL YES, I WOULD!!!” Before she thought what she was saying, she blurted out “Cindy and Beth told me they did that but I didn’t believe them.” Then she thought about what she had just said. She looked at me with a, Oh I fucked up look, and then ask me to promise not to let either of them what she had told me.
I told her “no big deal Kathy, it’s nothing I wouldn’t do myself with the right person. She looked like she was very deep in thought. I told her, “Forget about mentioning their names, it’s no big deal.” Kathy said, “Frank, I don’t know why but there is more I want to tell you but you have to promise to never tell anyone. I remaindered her about what was said here today didn’t go any further.
She asks, “What do you know about Cindy and Beth?” “Well, when we worked together they were good to work with and I always though of them as friends. Now I’m their supervisor and they still do a good job and I still think of the as friends.
Kathy smiled “remember, you promised, not a word. Did you know they are Bi-sexual swingers,” Now it was my turn for the mouth open, surprised look, along with “YOU GOTTA BE SHITING ME!!?” Kathy busted out laughing “NO, I’m not shitting you. Once when I was frustrated with Jerry I talked to them about it.
They felt so sorry for me they told me about being involved in the life style and some of the things they done. They offered to allow me to join them, either or both of the girls, one or both of the couples. I always wanted to try it but didn’t want to go alone and I knew Jerry would never do it.
Kathy asks, “You would really do that?” “What, swing with another couple, Hell Yes, in a heart beat? I just never thought of Cindy and Beth doing it.” Kathy laughed again “NO silly, you know, the other.” I thought about what she was asking then told her “Kathy, please understand I’m not making a pass at you and our little talk here is not intended to put any pressure on you at all. With that said if you’re asking me if I would EAT YOUR PUSSY, not yes but HELL YES. If you are asking if I would LICK and TONGUE FUCK YOUR ASSHOLE, not yes but HELL YES.
Kathy just set for the longest time then told me “OOOHHHH,WWWEEEE SHIT, that’s enough for now, and we need to go home. I cranked the car, pulled out and headed down the highway. In about two miles I was coming to the road to Kathy’s house. As I slowed down, she asks what I was doing. I told her I was slowing down to turn on her road. She smiled and said, “OK, I do need to pick up a change of clothes and my toothbrush. I didn’t say a word; I just pulled in her driveway and waited. She was in and out in just a few minutes carrying a small overnight bag.
As she was getting back in the car I ask her “Kathy are you sure you want to do this?” With a nervous smile, she said, “If it is alright with you I can tell you, I have never wanted anything more than this. I smiled back and told her “get your sweet ass in here and let’s go home.
It was only about a ten minute drive to my place. We didn’t talk at all; she took hold of my right hand, squeezing it for time to time until I pulled in my drive. As soon as we got inside, I gave her a quick tour of the house so she would know her way around.
When she saw I had two showers she asks if I would be upset if she showered alone I knew this was a big step for both of us and I told her it would be fine, I would meet her in the den when she was ready. I done a quick shave and shower, slipped on a pair of khaki shorts and a golf shirt then headed for the den.
I set on the coach and tried to relax. I was thinking about the things we talked about this afternoon. I could hardly believe my luck. Here I was setting in my den waiting for this drop-dead gorgeous lady to take her shower before we hopefully had a wild night of sex and I hadn’t even kissed her yet.
I heard the bathroom door close and in just a couple of seconds Kathy was standing at the door to the den. She was wearing a nightshirt that looked like a long man’s dress shirt that button down the front and it was sleeveless. The top three buttons were open showing a little cleavage. She was not wearing a bra, her nipples were pushing against the front of the shits, and the bottom of the shirt was about half way down her thighs.
What my eyes saw went straight to my cock and it got so hard my shorts were causing me pain. The only problem was part of this feeling stopped at my heart. I thought “hold on here Frank, this is about sex, don’t even think you are fall in love with this dream come true;” Kathy walked over and set down beside me on the couch. Her hand was trembling as she reached over and took my hand.
Kathy gives me a nervous smile and said, “Frank, I’m as nervous as a teenager on her first date, how about you?” I laughed and told her I would never have believed it but I’m as nervous as the groom at a shotgun wedding. We both laugher, then Kathy ask “what now” I told her “I don’t want to be go too fast and upset you. What I would like to do is let you go at your own pace and do only what you’re comfortable with.”
Kathy was squeezing my hand tighter and tighter. She said, “I don’t know if I can do that Frank, I’m so afraid I’ll do something wrong and piss you off. I pulled my hand loose from hers, took her by the shoulders and turned her to face me. I told her “listen to me Kathy and believe what I tell you. No matter what you do it will not be wrong and it will not piss me off.”
She ask “what about what I might say, if I get really turned on I tend to talk a little dirty. Once, several years ago Jerry lasted long enough I started reaching a climax. I got excited and told him to bang my pussy good, damn it, fuck me hard. He got so upset he lost his erection and was pissed of with me for a month.
I told her “Well, the difference here is, that would have turned me on even more. So say anything you feel like and it’s fine with me. She leaned over and gives me a light kiss on the lips. When she pulled back, we were looking deep into each other’s eyes. I could see the lust and excitement shining in her eyes but it was almost as I could see into her heart. Was it love, not love of sex but love of the heart?
I was so captured by the look in her eyes it took a second to realize she was talking. I ask “I’m sorry Honey, what did you say?” Kathy laughed, placed her hands on each of my cheeks and shook my head back and forth as though she was waking me up. She asks, “You’re telling me that you are mine to do with as I please and you’ll not be angry?” I dropped my arms to my side as in total surrender and with a big grin said “I’m yours for the taking my love.”
In one quick move, Kathy took her nightshirt by the bottom and pulled it up and over her head. She was setting there straddled me stark naked. She pressed her lips hard against mine and pushed her tongue deep into my mouth. I was trying to match the movement of her tongue but she was in and out, side to side and all around. She was so turned on she was making noises beyond a moan.
Suddenly she started licking my lips, nose, eyes, and ears. My whole face was wet with her saliva. She told me “get your fucking shirt off, why are you still dressed?” I started pulling my shirt over my head. Before I could get it completely of she was sucking on my nipples. She moved her right leg over, kneeling beside me without ever leaning my nipples.
She was fumbling with the top button. I pulled her hand away, quickly unbuttoned and pulled the zipper down enough to pull my shorts down to my knees, freeing my rock hard, throbbing cock. Kathy didn’t even look down. She just reaches down and wrapped her hand around my cock.
Kathy set up with a surprise look on her face, then looked down at her hand holding my cock. “HOLY FUCK, THAT’S A BIG FUCKING COCK, DO YOU THINK YOU’RE GOING TO ASSAULT ME WITH THIS BIG MOTHER FUCKER?”
I had never though of myself as any kind of a stud but this woman was making me feel good. I laughed as I told her “No Darling, I was going to let you assault me, remember?” “Can I kiss it on the head?” After a hearty laugh, I told her “Honey, you can do anything to my cock and to me that don’t cause permanent injury.”
Kathy squeezed my cock as she looked down at it. She looked like a kid on Christmas morning as she lean down and kissed the mushroom head of my cock. She pumped up and down a couple of time them kissed it again. Without looking up she said, “I really don’t know much about what to do, Cindy gives me a few pointers like being careful with my teeth and if I bit, not to bit too hard.
I run my fingers through her hair and told her “Katy, you do what excites you, I can tell you what is feeling good and you can take it from there. One thing I can tell you the wetter the better.” She didn’t reply, she just rose up a little so I could see what she was doing. Then pulled her hand up my shaft to the back of my cock head. She parted her lips and a long line of saliva slipped out and covered the head of my cock. Just before the saliva run over the side of her hand, she pulled her hand back down my shaft, twisting her hand spreading the wetness as she moved down.
It was such an erotic site I had to struggle hard to keep from cumming right then. A loud moan escaped my lips as she open her mouth and licked round my cock head while she continued to pump up and down on the shaft. She slid her mouth down my shaft until she hit the back of her throat causing her to gag hard.
She set up, looking at me with watery eyes and a big smile on her face “that’s a big cock but if you will give me time I promise I’ll do better.” I leaned down and gently kissed her on the lips and whispered, “Honey, it’s been a while since I cum and if you continue to do that you’re gonna end up with a mouth full of cum that you may not want.”
“NO, NO, I want your cum, in my mouth, on my face, in my pussy, in my ass, all over, I LOVE YOU FRANK HOWARD.” She suddenly pulled back and put her hand over her mouth. We just set looking at each other for a couple of seconds. She said “I sorry Frank, I didn’t mean to say that, it just slipped out.” I ask, “You didn’t mean to say what, you don’t want me to cum in all the places you mentioned?”
She laughed and gives me a love tap on the arm “no silly, you know what I was talking about.” I told her “Don’t worry about it Honey, you only said aloud what I’ve been thinking. In the mean time I have a long over due load of cum that is about to go somewhere. While we were talking, Kathy had continued pumping up and down my shaft.
A drop of per-cum eased out and run down to Kathy’s hand. She looked at it then at me. I smiled and nodded. She licked it up into her mouth, then she spit it out into her other hand, rubbed it on her pussy and pushed two fingers deep inside.
She took my cock back in her mouth and started bobbing up and down. I could feel my balls tingling and tightening up and I knew I had held it about as long as I could. Kathy was taking my cock deeper and deeper in her mouth. I could feel her saliva running down my shaft, making her hand even slicker.
I felt the needed to tell her again “Baby, I’m about to cum.” She just started pumping faster and I could feel her tongue on the underside of my cock head. It was all I could do not to grab the back of her head so I grabbed the edge of the couch as the first line of cum shot out of my cock and into her waiting mouth.
I heard her gag and cough just as the second shot hit the back of her throat. She giggled like a little girl but never pulled her mouth off my cock. I don’t think I had ever cum so much, I could feel some of it run down my shaft and onto my balls.
Finally the cum stopped flowing and I fell back against the back of the coach, wet with sweat and out of breath. Kathy set up and I could see by her tight lips she was holding some cum in her mouth. There was a little on her chin and each side of her mouth. I had never tasted male cum before and never expected to but before I knew it I had pulled Kathy to me and licked the cum off her mouth and chin.
She looked me as she tilted her head back a little, opened her mouth to show me the cum, then closed her mouth and swallowed. It was too much for her to handle and she gagged. Part of the cum run out of her mouth and down her chin. I pulled her to me again, licked my cum off her chin then kissed her hard on the lips pushing my tongue deep into her mouth.
She through her leg back across me and set down on my lap pushing my deflating cock against my stomach. I could feel the heat and moistness of her hot pussy. She pushed her breast into my chest and started rubbing her nipples against mine.
To my surprise, my cock was rock hard again. Kathy broke the kiss, moved her mouth up next to my ear. First, she run her tongue around the outer edge then plunged her tongue into my ear. She whispered, “Fuck my pussy you nasty cum eater, push your hard cock into my hot pussy, take me baby, take me now.”
I took her by the hips and raised her up enough to align the head of my cock up with her hot, wet lips. I used my hand to move the head up and down her lips a few times. Then I pushed the head just inside. She was so tight I stopped there and told her “you take it for here Baby, go at your own pace.
She moved her hips around just a little then looking deep into my eyes she said, “Here goes, all the way baby.” She dripped down and I was ball deep in her pussy. She let out a scream; she was so tight it felt like she was going to pull the skin off my cock.
Her head was titled back a little and I could see the tears well up in her eyes and run down her cheeks. She looked down to where our bodies joined together then back at me. She smiled and said, “Damn, that’s a pussy full of cock. I kissed her on both her tear covered cheeks “just take your time Baby, we have all night.
She set still for a few seconds then slowly started moving her hips back on forth a little. As her pussy stretched, her own pussy juice and my pre-cum made it easier she started moving her hips faster. Then she started rotating around, grinding her hot pussy around on my cock.
I placed my hand on her hips and started moving my hips up and down as much as I could. She was having one orgasm after another, my cock and balls were soaked with her cum. I could feel my balls tingling and couldn’t believe I was about to cum again.
Kathy had stopped rotating her hips and was simply thrusting back and forth. She was moaning and from time to time she would let out a little giggle. Suddenly she reaches up and pinched both my nipples. I was surprised at the effect it had on me. It was like an electric shock shot through my body and it pushed me over the edge.
“III’MMMM CCCUUUMMMMIINNGGG” I said. Kathy pushed her pussy down hard on my cock and I could hear her growl like a wild animal. She was setting still but her pussy muscles were pulling every drop of cum out of my cock.
We were both breathing heavy and wet with sweat. She lad her head on my shoulder and I could feel her firm breast preassing against my chest. We laid there a couple of minutes relaxing and enjoying the feel of each other’s bodies.
Kathy flicked her tongue out around the outside of my ear. Then she whispered, “Your cock’s still about half hard.” “Yes, that’s very unusual for me, must have something to do with the person I’m with,” I said with a smile. “Can we suck each other now?” “KATHY, you’re a real slut, that would be so nasty.”
Kathy moved her head back, looking me in the eyes with a big smile she said, “YES, I know, what do you think?”
I didn’t say a word, I just wrapped my arms around her, holding her in place as I turned and laid her down on the couch. I placed my hand over her pussy as I pulled out my cock out.
If I was going to do this, I want to savor as much of our combined fluid as I could. I tuned and straddled her head. Her mouth was open and waiting as I lowered my cock. I told her “Baby, you can control how deep I go by my hips. She just grunted her reply as she took my cock deep into her mouth.
Her pubic hair was so wet with our cum it was matted to her pussy lips. Using my fingers, I parted her lips and licked my tongue down the length of her pussy. The taste and the thought of the perverted thing we were doing was such a turn on. I knew I was hooked. I placed her legs behind my arms exposing her pussy and ass even more. I lowered my mouth over her pussy and sucked as I pushed my tongue inside.
Kathy pushed down and a large glob of our cum rolled out of her pussy and into my mouth. It was very thick and I almost chocked as I swallowed but I managed to get it down and wanted more. I licked my tongue as far as I could get into her pussy coating it good then pulling it back in my mouth. I swished it aroung in my mouth then swallow.
I went back again but this time when I pulled my tongue out Kathy pulled me by my arms. As I turned around my cock popped out of her mouth and she pulled my lips down to hers. I plunged my tongue into her mouth and she hungerly sucked it clean. We were both breathing heavy and we were wet with sweat as we rubbed our bodies together.
I make one more trip to her pussy, licking and sucking until there was no more cum to be had. One last kiss, sharing our cum then we just held each other until our breathing returned to normal.
Kathy’s head was lying on my shoulder; I heard her giggle a little and I ask what was so funny. “I was just wondering, are you gonna try to fuck me in the ass?”
I pushed her back a little and saw the big smile on smile on her face. “Well, it had crossed my mind but it won’t be tonight. You’ve wore me out and I don’t think I would be up to it” as I smiled back at her.”Cindy and Beth tells me we need to do a couple of emenas before we get VERY DEEP into anal play”
I laugher at her play on words and ask “WE, what is this WE SHIT?” “Look Lover, Jerry’s the only cock that had ever been inside me before. Now that mushroom head of yours has destroyed my pussy. If you think you’re gonna put that monster up my ass you need to know I’m gonna have a couple of fingers or something in yours.”
Her face was aglow and I could see the excitement in her eyes. “You mean to say you think you’re gonna run a tube up my ass and fill my gut full of water, watch me shit it all out then do it again.” She just noddied her head. “Then you want me to do the the same to you” “YES!! YES!! Do it two times”
I forced a serious look on my face as I looked at her. Suddenly the smile left her face and I could see fear in her eyes, She put her arms around my neck and buried her head into my shoulder. “Oh Frank, I’m so sorry. That deamon that I have held inside all these years is starting to come out. I have fought it all my life but being with you like this is making the walls crumble.”
I was confused “What deamon, what do you think you have done wrong?” When she pulled back and looked at me, I could see her cheeks were wet with tears and that look of fear still in her eyes. “The things we have done tonight are things I have wanted to do most of my life but I was taught they were dirty, nasty and only bad people woud even think about them. Jerry told me I had a deamon in me that made me think such thinks.”
I lifter her chin untill our eyes met. I smiled and said “BULLSHIT! If you have a deamon then so do I. For every one thing we have done tonight a thousand other thoughts have run throung my mine ,as you say, dirty, nasty thing I would like for us to do. Here there are no walls, no barriers, no guilt.
I could see her relax and the look of fear in her eyes went away. She put her arms around my neck and kissed me on the lips. It was a soft, warm kiss, not sexy or lustful. It was a kiss of love. It cought me off guard so much it took me a second to recognize it for what it was. I put my arms around her waist as I return her kiss.
When we broke the kiss she laided her head on my shoulder, “Frank, I ah, ah, I ah.” I pulled her coser to me and told her. “I know baby, I guess it’s a strange feeling for both of us.
“How about we take a shower and get some sleep?” We stood, walked naked, hand, and hand to the master bathroom. I adjusted the water and we both stepped in and held each other close as the warm water flowed over us. Finaly, I lathered her up and washed her head to foot. Then she did the same to me. Notheing too sexy, just gentle, loving touching and kissing.
I lay down on the bed and Kathy spooned close up behing me. Her warm body felt so good next to mine. I turned enough to kiss her and told her, “Goodnight my love.” “Goodnight sweety.” Then I heard in a very low whisper, “I love you Frank.” I smiled and just said, “UH HUH!” She put her arm around my waist and pulled herself even closer.
“Honey, would it be okay if I called Cindy and Beth tomorrow and tell them about tonight”
“You mean, tell them everything?”
“AAHHH, yes if you don’t mind.”
I laughed, “Yes, Tell whatever you would like Lover, I’m just sorry I can’t be there when you tell them. I would love to see the look on their faces.”
This is the first story I've ever given a positive rating and a negative comment to. Basically, the sex is hot, but the grammar, spelling, and diction are almost as far from English as it can get and still be decipherable. Here's a hint: use a word processor to write your story, use spell check, then copy and paste it here. It won't solve your grammar or diction, but it will help a lot. You can get Apache Open Office for free, and the word processor also has a grammar check. That should catch your tenses, and will leave you with diction (choice of words). I'm sure several people here would happily edit your work for free and fix your problems, just for the sake of the community.
no real plot , just sex for the sake of sex, not even a good storyline. elecution and grammar shocking, is English your home language? if so you need to go back to school.
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Thank you. Please fix this and repost it.
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You really need to proofread your work. Seriously! Hi school = high school, oral sexy = oral sex, questing = questioning, of = off, straddled = straddling, leaning = leaving, Katy = Kathy, through = threw, for = from, dripped = dropped, lad = laid, aroung = around, tells = told, laugher = laughed, deamon = demon, lifter = lifted, cought = caught, laided = laid, behing = behind, notheing = nothing,
You also left out a boat load of words that should have been in there.
Commas can be your friend and they help your readers.