| 2015-07-27 19:17:59 |
paperweight
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The story itself wasn't too bad, but I gave it a negative rating because your grammar and punctuation were so horrible it was physically hard to read it. Oh, and by the way, you always capitalize the word "I". |
| 2015-07-25 09:05:16 |
Ahriman: The Evolution of a Serial Killer 6
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If you read the other parts, you'll know he has both. |
| 2015-07-17 16:14:14 |
Common Erotic Mistakes_(0)
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I love this! (Yes, an exclamation point is necessary there.) I know a lot of people will call you a "whatever" Nazi, but I am sick of reading crap where the author has no concept of how the English language is supposed to be written. Another thing you could have added is the incorrect or excessive use of commas and run-on sentences. Again, great job! |
| 2015-08-06 02:05:57 |
Ahriman: The Evolution of a Serial Killer 12
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Oops! Forgot to sign in before I wrote that. :( |
| 2015-09-13 17:50:20 |
Ahriman: The Evolution of a Serial Killer 16
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Chapter 17 was removed because of age-related issues. I will not repost it differently, nor will I edit it to change the ages. |