| 2014-10-29 03:08:32 |
it happened on vacation (and continued at home) revised and reposted pt 9 thru 14
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I must admire your writing skills. You make very few technical errors and no spelling mistakes that I noticed (or could I have been distracted by the action?) You write in a fast paced style and that does keep a reader on the edge of his/her seat. I enjoyed your story. Thank you for sharing. |
| 2016-05-25 23:56:52 |
In The Beginning: Chapters 2,3 & 4
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Believe me Dumb-ass, been there, done that! |
| 2014-12-28 03:04:09 |
13 year old virgin
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What can I say that hasn't already been submitted? Of course there are a few errors that detract from the free flow of readimg (see what I mean?) but in spite of changing POV in mid stride and the controversy over sex with a minor it was a sweet love story (what age were Romeo and Juliet? That didn't bother Shakespeare, did it!). I enjoyed the romp and hope you add a sequel. Well done and thanks for sharing with us. |
| 2015-01-02 00:37:57 |
The Pin
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The story was realistic and well paced to keep me on the edge of my chair wondering where you were going with it next. I enjoyed the read and thank you for sharing your tale with us. I found the grammatical errors minimal and easy to overlook so I would consider your effort very readable. Keep up the good work. |
| 2015-01-10 00:42:56 |
Wild Riding to Dublin_(1)
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I'd give you a positive rating at least twice if they would let me, Classic. Twas a wee bit much to tell him now but truth be told, it sounds like he does deserve it. Would love to have been a soldiering and in that lorry on that bonnie night, love. Do tell us more when you feel the mood come over you. |