| 2014-06-11 09:44:46 |
Brute - Day One, Pt. 1
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Already working on it, oh anonymous reader of mine. Might be a few days though before the next part is up. |
| 2014-06-11 17:28:09 |
Brute - Day One, Pt. 1
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If you are downvoting tell me why. What's wrong with the story? Comments like "Don't bother" tell me nothing. |
| 2014-06-12 05:27:50 |
Brute - Day One, Pt. 1
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No insight into the protagonist's mental illness? Really? That is literally the focus of the piece. Everything I did... the sudden changes of mood, the inner dialogue, the way he spoke, the actions he took... all of these illustrate his mental condition. Nothing about the story is just nastiness for nastiness' sake. It is certainly an experiment to see how dark I can go before it bothers me as a writer but it is not just 'for the sake of it'. |
| 2014-06-12 08:06:15 |
Brute - Day One, Pt. 1
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What insight do you think is missing then? What do you think makes his anger more real and less absurd? What makes him more than unattractive? |