| 2014-06-06 19:43:17 |
Best Sister in the World!!! Part 2
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A hell of a lot better than the first one. good buildup & tension, great length, & a truly good read. The first one left too much to be desired, but this one definitely makes up for it & leaves ye wanting more. After reading this second part, I'm definitely interested & intrigued to see how the story will continue & can't wait for the next part! |
| 2013-07-08 00:53:51 |
Alicia, after school studying
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not too bad for a 1st story, though it sure isn't a True Story.. sounds more like ye wrote out a fantasy ye have had. not to mention ye need to do a lot more to build up the anticipation (take your time with the sex scenes & it will make the reader get into it & want to read more). it has a lot of potential & with a bit of work could become great. |
| 2013-07-08 01:02:00 |
The Angel Next Door_(0)
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sorry for the negative rating, I meant to give a positive rating. the story, although short, is very good start. |
| 2014-05-18 19:42:12 |
The Johnsons
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wonderful start to a story with a great buildup. though I misclicked & gave it a negative rating, I meant to give it a positive rating & have added it to my favorites. I can't wait to continue the story. |
| 2015-05-14 01:57:29 |
Roses for Monica
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Well Done. No other words need be said. |