| 2014-02-28 17:50:51 |
victim of the bad girls club (part two)
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Still a great story but it sure needs Proof Reading. Waiting for the long weekend of hot sex. Good Luck !! (countrycadillac) |
| 2013-06-02 12:43:36 |
Young Neighbor_(1)
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I very much enjoyed this fine and well written story. I must say it was quiet professionaly done. I look forward to reading more of what you will be writing in the future. |
| 2013-06-03 09:57:28 |
Sis Comes Home For Memorial Day - Part II
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This is, for sure an over the top story. The writing and form are excellent. I can't wait for chapter 3. |
| 2013-06-04 09:31:15 |
Sara's Awakening Part 7
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Almost perfect ? Just a little more at the end would have been nice. Not finding fault, just commenting. Your a great writer, keep up the fine work and don't stop with Sara's tale yet. |
| 2013-06-04 09:52:57 |
Poppin' Cherry
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Not too bad for your first. Now, SLO DOWN, more detail, more interaction between the subject's. Proof read your story several times while rereading it and then one final time before publishing it. You have the right idea, and your flow is good for a starter. You will do fine. Good Luck !! |