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Comments from animal99
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2013-03-24 23:41:14 | Family Knows Best | Wow.. That was such a good story! I was So surprised cause i really did not expect it to be that good or well written :) Please- write more stories! I wish this site had a way of saving favorite writers to my profile so i could easily be notified of their newest or latest stories automatically because you would certainly be on that list. |
| 2013-03-25 22:27:04 | Tentacle Monster | i think you rushed thru the story. Someone mentioned "building up" and they were right by my perspective. It's a promising 1st draft. |
| 2013-03-26 22:38:43 | my daughter_(8) | if they can't sign their name to a comment, then they're just bullying and not offering any real help. I liked yyour story. It shows a plot and good story-telling skill. But I agree in that it seemed too short. Not to sound like some English teacher, but it needs some fleshing out. Mind you, most of your readers have some college education or at least a few years of being struck across their hands by an English & Grammer teacher- so they will be the first to point out your violating basic rules... if you only take the common elements of each person's criticism of your story, you will see what you need to "fix". Unfortunately, some people labelled your story negatively after seeing a few glaring violations and seem to ignore your skill as a storyteller.... So fix you mistakes by proofreeading your future stories but don't let anyone discourage you from writing more stories. |
| 2013-03-27 00:17:32 | Seducing my cousin Anthony | that was unusually hot... good story, though :) |
| 2013-03-27 00:22:23 | my first oral sex | i couldn't even read this story- it seriously needs reformating before i'd even attempt to read it. Please fix and repost (delete old version after reposting!) |