| 2012-06-23 08:53:31 |
Progenitor 1: The Beginning
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Your story is unique to say the least. I don't want to be negative but better spacing would make it more readable. I think you should space the paragraphs a little bit more so the don't seem to run together. I am looking forward to part two and any others to follow. |
| 2012-06-30 06:51:32 |
My interesting summer
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Need a re-write and better spacing. |
| 2012-06-30 07:05:35 |
Rape A Virgin Aunt
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Too long and too sick. I could only scan it not read that sick crap. They should take this crap off the site. |
| 2012-07-06 15:04:43 |
My not so innocent sister
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My only problem was spacing. Part two should be spaced a bit more for easier reading. |
| 2012-07-19 16:38:17 |
Impregnating my Unsuspecting Sister
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The only reason I gave you a negative rating was due to spacing. Too close together makes it very hard to read. Please add some spaces between paragraphs and resubmit. |