| 2021-06-01 17:53:49 |
[b]The Adventures of a Sexy Green Eyed Girl New York City [/b]
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You could build another chapter on to this story, given the opening that remains in the last paragraph, and (given how you have told the story so far) it certainly has the legs for it. Another chapter, or not, it's a great story - well done! |
| 2021-06-07 17:02:40 |
Me and Mrs. B.
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I can relate to this story so well. I had - and still have - a thing about red hair. Shame about the slip with the bright blue shoes, that became bright green shoes a couple of paragraphs later, but it didn't spoil the story at all. Well done! |
| 2021-06-15 18:32:20 |
The Mother in Law
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Good start, and the door would appear to be open for a lot more, I hope. Well done. |
| 2021-06-23 09:02:17 |
A Father's Bargain
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Good story, although some small errors, but it didn't spoil things. I think you should have someone proof read for you - I know how hard it can be to spot your own mistakes. |
| 2021-06-17 07:57:15 |
The Setup (Chapter 2)
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LOVE IT! More please. |