| 2021-02-17 00:30:01 |
T O N G U E - - T I E D
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Very nicely done - I loved it. You had a good plot, and you carried it right through to the end (if it was?). Keep writing! |
| 2021-03-23 08:20:29 |
Fucking Aimee In her Sleep
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I liked the story, but you need to make sure that you keep your story straight. "an empty bottle of bourbon" and "a vodka induced sleep" clearly doesn't do that, but don't let that stop you - perhaps have someone proof read your stories before publishing them is the way to go? |
| 2021-03-08 10:29:33 |
The story of tintin
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Can't wait for the second half! |
| 2021-03-03 11:54:31 |
Lift perks II
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I agree absolutely with the last two observations. It isn't perfect, but it's a good story, and I enjoyed it. If you can do better?? Put up or shut up! |
| 2021-03-22 09:32:37 |
Unbridled interracial pleasure
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You're on a roll. GO FOR IT!! |