| 2011-08-15 20:06:43 |
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Its good to see a writer come on board that totally has it togeather. You have all the talent, all tools and all the toys.
That was a great story. Well Written and well spaced.
Most of all it worked so well. Natural progression is the best way to do these types of stories. Agreat night of first sex, and caring and tenderness and love. This is Romance and far far from Porn.
He is 17 and she is only 15, so not much time was wasted and it gave them time to mature and grow as individuals.
I will not nit pick a perfect story. Other then the Em was pretty the author left out such things as Breast Size and Penis size and wisely as that does not matter. What mattes here is the love and desire to be togeather and the total lack of B.S.
These guys got right down to it, kept at it, and 10 years are keeping at it. Lots of Adult Brothers and Sisters live in the same House or Apartment, She has her room and he has his. She is now 25 and he is 27 still prime time for 10 more years. |
| 2011-08-15 20:21:13 |
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Southern Canada. Maybe South Western Canada like Vancover B.C.
Late 1st Snow was the clue. Writing not English, to American, not American to English. Not Aussie because of Snow and Christmas. That leaves Canada and sometimes it Snows late in Western Canada and sometimes Vancover does not have much because of the Pacific Ocean Winds. Inland yes but the Coast No. I have been there several times and always enjoyed my self.
You can tell the Tourist to Hawaii from Canada as opposed to Tourist from Mainland America. The people from Canada are more friendly and open and come into our local Supermarket as family with their fresh Hawaiian Sun Burns. It get rarely over 90 here evan and August, because of the winds. But the hawaiian is murder on white skin. Some people like to come West Side because its cheaper to stay and you can rent a condo or suite.
Often i see Dad, Mom, and spruting Sister old enough to pop, and Dork Brother a couple of years older or younger, Should be getting sist |
| 2011-08-15 20:37:54 |
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Sometimes you see Daddy come in with Daddys Girl. Some Girls make no Bones about it. Boning Pop on Vacation, now go prove it.
Pops are usually fit at least to a point and a little red faced. Daughter who act that way around their Dads are usually in Love and just starting to come into their own nd have Sex, with the best hunk they can find, daddy.
Sex time with Brother has really grown over the years and with the help of the net and sites like this. The Stigma and Guilt are less.
I never had the joy of a mother to love or a sister to play with, have a relationship with or to have Sex with. So i enjoy reading about it and writing some.
I have never thought it was worng, wrong as long as the Sister Brother age spread was close and as the writer said No One is Abused. Halfs even less so, and Step and Adopts Not At All, go for it.
Go for it any way life is to short for shoulda, coulda, woulda, if i had only known. I believe in the natural barrier but it can be overcome, it bo |
| 2011-08-21 02:03:26 |
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I think this is a really good story, well written and well edited, and well spaced, easy to understand and follow. I think it is a really really good first effoort here. I really don't think its a 1st effort. 9/10 for effort and being somewhat different, the boy is both thoughtful and cunning with out being mean. I am not sure the dicl size is vital but it does not hurt.
I would have had the kids a year or so younger. I don't like to start off almost grown. Also I would never make the females not able to have babies on the pill yes, Syerile No. Reason is it dead ends your future chapters. Its like a Donkey and a Horse, the Mule has no place to go.
Let the xhusband take the hit for not being able to make the babys. Measels went to his nuts, the War whatever, make him a Hero if you want.Try Not to dead and your people.
I disagree with the person who says its the same, its not. Yes many of the plotline facts are the same but what was done with them was different. |
| 2011-08-21 02:06:19 |
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Looking for Part 2, Part one is in my favs. You are a good writer one to watch. |