| 2011-07-19 20:30:42 |
I Give My Niece A Ride 2;A Day At The Beach
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Extremely well done, one of my favorites |
| 2011-07-25 14:48:32 |
MY SISTER & THE EXCHANGE STUDENT PART 1 THE RIDE (revised)
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The story line is excellent but you have so many typos, misspellings, wrong words--like weather when you meant whether and breaks when you meant brakes. Proofreading would have helped and spacing as mentioned by the others. I'm looking forward to the other parts. |
| 2011-07-26 15:11:31 |
The potential client
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The quotesappear as question marks on the version you see when you log in. On here, reading it, it was fine. this was a really dynamic and forceful story. Well done |
| 2011-08-02 19:40:33 |
it happened on vacation (and continued at home) pt 8
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This is a great series,always a + ote, but you misuse of words is comical at times. You are = you're, not "your" which is possessive. also, "shear pleasure?" shears are scissors. You mean "sheer." Just a couple of many throughout the story. It would be great if you would proofread. I use Word and it usually cues me that a word is wrong. |
| 2011-08-02 19:42:13 |
it happened on vacation (and continued at home) pt 8
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Sorry my comment is so hard to read. My keyboard sucks and I keep forgetting how this site butchers quotation marks. |