| 2012-06-11 13:21:56 |
You can look but you can't touch.(without question marks)
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Love the detail and enthusiasm! Really makes me wish I was that guy. Some story on how you might have seduced him would have been nice, but great first story! Only minor editing issues otherwise. (More and smaller paragraphs, especially for dialog, and capitalization.) But otherwise great! |
| 2012-06-11 15:47:38 |
Naughty School Girl
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VERY SEXY. Cannot wait for more. |
| 2012-06-11 16:08:12 |
Caught You Looking: Chapter 3
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I love it. Not every story has a happy ending. Life is beautiful and sucks. In human history we remember the horrible things more clearly than the wonderful for a reason. We learn and grow from mistakes and hardships more than from our successes. I would love to see a part 4 in the future, but let it brew and never give up on what you love. If it's true to you, that's the story you need to tell. |
| 2012-06-11 16:10:11 |
Caught You Looking: Chapter 3
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Oops, that last one was me, but log in must have timed out. Anytime I post I try and not make it anonymous as I feel "If it's worth saying, it's worth standing behind." |
| 2012-06-18 07:56:26 |
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Much better WRITTEN story than your previous ones. Keep up the good work. Me (personally) like the girls a little older, because sex without at least the chance of pregnancy is nothing but masturbation. |