| 2010-07-23 23:57:35 |
Annie Loves Her Daddy, Part-1
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This story was nice, but writing from both points of view was jarring. And the father moved pretty quickly to feel her up, without any real hesitation... more build up and realism would have helped. |
| 2011-07-10 22:15:21 |
My Asian Treat
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Your writing style is a bit sparse but it suited your story well and made it very credible. I'm looking forward to more. |
| 2011-08-16 11:00:03 |
Hot Little Sister for Summer
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I gave this a bad rating because it's a rip-off. Do your own writing. |
| 2012-12-05 02:03:09 |
Becoming a single mom
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This story sounded true, and raw, and as detached as the young girl watching fireworks while she was being raped. I found it sad, not sexy. I hope that you'll write more (on any topic). |
| 2012-12-16 23:21:38 |
ALLIE_(0)
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This was sincere, wistful, and a bit romantic. Your English was up to the task. Thank you. |