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Comments from WantSumCandyLittleGirl
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2021-09-01 13:22:18 | The Artist | The story line and plot are good, but it’s the telling that needs work. I’d highly recommend you use a proof reader (Grammarly is a free, online app and is configurable for British or American English). It would really help with the overall flow. Formatting the dialogue and checking capitalization will also help. Still, good story and I gave it a Positive vote. |
| 2021-09-10 22:40:03 | Tiffany, My Teenage Slut | Really good story and looking forward to the next installment. Two issues: 1) You started out with one scene, but it doesn’t fit into the story. 2) When he starts entering Tiffany, she’s on her hands and knees - so, how did his balls slap against her ass? Little things that make a really good story great. |