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Comments from WantSumCandyLittleGirl
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2021-05-15 01:36:47 | Golden Lake | While this is a good story, it could be improved with some proofreading for spelling, grammar, and tense changes. I would also suggest breaking up the paragraphs so when the subject changes a new paragraph begins. Lastly, separate the dialogue by speaker and put a line break between the speakers. |
| 2021-05-21 15:14:03 | The Houseguest | To continue from doll1’s comments. Focus on making sure punctuation and dialogue quotation marks are present. Both will really help in the story telling and flow for the reader. I look forward to reading the next few installments to this delightful story. |
| 2021-07-05 00:59:14 | Lucky Encounter With Kate At The Beach | How many times are you going to submit this story? www.sexstories.com/story/96526/ |
| 2021-06-27 19:28:11 | Virtual Third | The grammar wasn’t as bad as Z_Switch implies, but it could stand a good proofreading. Story line was good, you could have added more about what she was typing, and lengthened the sex a little. Otherwise, good story. |
| 2021-06-27 19:00:17 | Thinking with Portals | The only thing that could make this better - where can I get my hands on one of these? Great story, hot as fuck. |