| 2010-09-23 09:44:32 |
my sis's bad day
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Pretty good story - but if it's not yours, who's is it? Why didn't you cite the original author? Even though you say it's not yours, if you don't cite the author, people are going to believe this is your work - which is called plagarism. BTW, that's a fancy word for lying. |
| 2010-09-23 09:47:07 |
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You know, you do beg the question in that how prevalent is this fantasy? But, the story, overall, isn't so much a story as a diatribe on what the fantasy is all about. Then there are the obvious spelling and grammatical errors. Sorry, didn't like it. |
| 2010-09-23 10:19:18 |
Young Lust_(0)
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Good story and plot line, but the paragraph separation and length need some work. I noticed a couple spelling and grammar errors, but nothing egregious. Looking forward to more of your work. I rated it Positive. Thanks. |
| 2010-09-23 14:07:46 |
Alexandra's Secret Advice to Her Brother
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It was a good story, plot line was excellent. Your attempt at writing from a female perspective was noteworthy, although it lacked the feminine touch. The irony of the last sentence, though, truly made the story. |
| 2010-09-23 14:11:57 |
sisterly wake up surprise
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A little far fetched about being 11 and all, but good story line and good attempt at a plot. Needs some work on grammar, but not to bad. |