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Comments from WantSumCandyLittleGirl
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2010-08-04 06:37:48 | Sharing My Room With Sis | All in all, very well written plot and story. Very erotic without being aggressively sexual, I could feel the story unfolding as I was reading it. There was great development and the climax left me wanting to read more. A few small spelling and grammar errors, but nothing that can't be corrected with some additional proof reading. Thanks for sharing. |
| 2010-08-04 07:08:45 | Sharing My Room With Sis: The 2nd Day | Again, very erotic and well written. Again, needs some additional proofreading for typos and grammar. However I am so looking forward to chapter 3 in this story. |
| 2010-08-04 07:27:02 | Sharing My Room With Sis: Being a Friend | Again - very erotic and well written. However, now that I have read the first three, I am beginning to see a trend. Your buildup is excellent but then you rush through the sex as if it's something you don't know how to write about. Take time, develop the sex and the love between the two, expand on it. You have excellent details leading in to the activity but fail to keep that part of the detail going. Keep working on the spelling and grammar. You tell a great story, just need to work on it some. |
| 2010-08-18 14:40:29 | Jessica, My Next-Door Neighbor | That was a good read, well written. The plot was well thought out and it engaged the reader to keep reading. Minor grammar, but nothing to be overly worried about. The story left me wanting the next chapter. Really wanting the next chapter. I most definitely would enjoy reading the continuing saga. You did a good job. Thanks. |
| 2010-08-18 14:40:58 | Jessica, My Next-Door Neighbor | That was a good read, well written. The plot was well thought out and it engaged the reader to keep reading. Minor grammar, but nothing to be overly worried about. The story left me wanting the next chapter. Really wanting the next chapter. I most definitely would enjoy reading the continuing saga. You did a good job. Thanks. |