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Comments from taverner
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2011-08-15 08:44:14 | My sister Lauren in the bathroom | This a good story and generally well told, but it would be better if you made the dialogue a little more realistic and less formal. Nice descriptions, though. Part 2? |
| 2011-09-09 10:24:34 | My sis is irresistible!_(0) | Good story line. I like the slightly unusual way you have approached it, with the guy lusting for his sister but fucking her friend, but you do need to work on your spelling. Keep it up, and bring on Chapter 2. |
| 2011-11-21 18:19:55 | My Sister In Law Beth_(1) | A very sexy but also kind of sweet story. I look forward to the rest of the series. Personally, I would have liked you to give us a better description of Beth, but the story is so well-written it makes up for that. Excellent work. |
| 2012-03-02 22:26:31 | THE GIRLS NEXT DOOR_(1) | For a first attempt at story writing, this is great. Your visual descriptions are excellent, and your dialogue works, too. The story is sexy but realistic, and well put together. I normally like a bit of buildup, but in the context of the setting you have created, I disagree with those who said the sex was too sudden. I do agree your proof reading let you down a little, but overall it is a hot little story that deserves some further chapters. |
| 2012-07-05 21:02:50 | Experimentation and Exploration the beginning | Cute story, very sexy and well written, with a touch of wit. Well done. |