| 2009-11-20 09:45:05 |
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Love the story. Fix your paragraphs (add a spacer line between). Indents never stay so forget about that. Watch the spelling and sentence structure. Otherwise keep writing. Don't end the story too soon. Actually I've found it best not to end the story at all. If you want to quit writing it, just stop. Or perhaps you'll have a better time at ending stories than I've had. Good luck. |
| 2010-07-20 23:07:34 |
Daddy's Tease
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Good story, should have broken it into two episodes though. |
| 2010-08-14 12:18:14 |
Sharing My Room With Sis
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Nicely done. Good setup. A few typos but story line was great. Had me hard and wanting for more. I'll read the rest of the series. You should write more stories. |
| 2010-08-14 12:19:44 |
Sharing My Room With Sis: The 2nd Day
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Another good one. I like the way you are moving the story along, not too fast but hot enough to keep me coming back for more. |
| 2010-08-14 12:26:24 |
Sharing My Room With Sis: Being a Friend
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I'm still liking these stories. Keep them cumming... |