| 2011-05-01 16:20:22 |
My Older Brother, Avery
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Very hot story! I can't wait for your next one. |
| 2014-08-06 05:56:31 |
When Toni Cums
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Very hot story! I have to confess that naughty young redheads with matching pussy hair are a weakness of mine so I had a great mental image the entire time I was reading it. |
| 2014-08-06 05:43:30 |
Mythland
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I like your writing style and you're very descriptive. I enjoyed the story but I will be honest, you need to work on your spelling and I think you would benefit from having a friend or mentor who proofreads and offers advice on tightening up the wording and making sure everything flows well. Everyone can use a second set of eyes to offer suggestions, you obviously have talent. |
| 2018-02-25 02:50:29 |
The French Lesson
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I started this story yesterday morning but didn't get the opportunity to finish it before I had to go to work. I made sure to finish it today, it's a terrific story and very well-written. I agree with the other comments about a proof-reader to catch typos that don't show in spell check but it didn't detract from my enjoyment of the story. I need to read your other series on here but based on this story I would rate you among the top three or so writers who submit stories here. Thank you for sharing and I look forward to more stories! |