| 2014-07-08 20:29:58 |
She is the One (Part 4)
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I have read and enjoyed each part so far. However, the forceful involvement of Amanda toward Jack in this sequel was too far over the top and simply not credible. If her motive, as she says, is to force Jack to fuck her, she should know through her experience with Alan that it simply can't work. She can't impale herself on Jack's cock unless he is aroused and erect and he's obviously indicated that he is not. |
| 2008-11-01 07:44:46 |
Jeff and his Cousin
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Well Jeff, I definitely enjoyed this story. Good theme on first sexual experiences. As I'm sure you are already aware, there is room for improvement in your spelling and writing skills. But I'm glad you did not let that deter you from submitting this story. Even with the errors, it was both credible and strokeworthy. |
| 2008-11-05 09:30:26 |
Sleeping in the girls room
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Very good, well written story. |
| 2008-11-27 06:31:07 |
Looking back_(1)
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Great story! It was incredibly hot and very well written. I was hoping you'd leave an opening for a sequel. But the ending sorta indicated otherwise. |
| 2009-01-16 05:18:40 |
Alex and Justin discover their love for each other
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That's a really good, well written story. One of the rare ones here with no incestuous involvement or offbeat fetishes. Just romance, love, sweetness and sex, which I find very erotic, especially when combined with a young couple's first time. You could have enhanced it by including one or two a more of the couple's subsequent sexual encounters in the story but maybe you're saving that for a sequel -- I hope! |