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Comments from T140
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2024-11-03 01:56:46 | HOBO 19 & 20 ( The End) | I appreciate the quality and depth to this story. Your des criptive narrative gave life to the characters throughout. The death of Michelle was a shock as much as anything. May your ink never run dry. |
| 2024-11-03 11:38:46 | How I become daddy's lover… | A nice change in perspective in your story, makes for good reading. As BigDaddyDG says, a little more work on the grammar and structure of your sentences and you will be a winner. Internalising the narrative is a good way to illuminate the main character. |