2021-03-14 11:47:12 |
My Sweet Little Marie II
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Bowen, part 3 has been submitted. Please let me know what you think. |
2021-03-27 21:20:00 |
Fallen and Helpless
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Rob, waiting on part 2. Great fucking story! |
2021-04-11 09:27:38 |
Older guy still has strong sexual desire
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The one-line-at-a-time format makes the story difficult to flow. Silly details about needing a condom when it's a fantasy is a distraction. The details before the fantasy started were unnecessary and boring. The scenario was plausible, however, no interest developed on my part. There was no de***********ion of the characters. What does your wife look like? You say you're old, but is your wife a hot 50 yo? |
2021-05-23 04:11:34 |
Broken Little Thing: Chapter 2
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Love your writing style. Cannot wait for Ch 3 were he makes arrangements to keep her and gather get to enjoy each other anytime they want. |
2021-05-14 01:43:17 |
Little Olivia IV
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@wantsum - Thanks for your comment and I’m glad you’re enjoying the story. I try proofreading, but I guess some mistakes get by. I can only learn from my mistakes if I know what they are. Help me out. Was it grammar or spelling? |