| 2020-12-09 03:54:22 |
How Traditions Start – part 18
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Excellent chapter! Very well written. |
| 2020-12-15 00:56:44 |
How Traditions Start – part 20 and final
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Excellent story, you really did a stellar job with the whole concept. You should keep writing, even if it's not erotic. PM me if you have writing elsewhere. |
| 2020-12-15 13:48:31 |
Quarantined with Mom and My Sisters Chapter 5: Loving Mom and Two Hot Sisters
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Where is chapter 4? |
| 2021-01-03 14:03:35 |
My girlfriends daughter Madison
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I like the story, but you have a lot of grammatical issues you need to address. Verb tense switches from present to past. You have a number of run-on sentences, try and watch the length of your sentences. And when you're speaking, you need to put the speaking parts as their own sentence in quotes, and make sure your reader knows who's speaking; says Madison, I said, etc. Get the free version of Grammarly, it will help. Keep going! |
| 2021-02-12 20:57:12 |
An incest birthday
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So for those about to start this Story, the first thing you should know is that Kevin (nivek_88) never finished the last chapter, and hasn't been on any sight since 2017. Second, his writing is rudimentary at best. That being said, I loved his characters, and the story itself. So, I have started on a labor of love for this story to fix it and repost it with an ending that does it justice. To understand the scope of that,Grammarly found over 8,000 basic error in punctuation, spelling, and word usage. It's going to take a while, for edits and rewrites. I will not post until the complete story is complete. Please see my current works under James_Gina. |