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Comments from Cypriano
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2020-01-17 08:29:12 | Zoe, My New Passion Chapter 2 | You write dialogue like it is a play. OK....but don't y=use quotation marks. You introduce the speaker in each line. But don't write exposition in the speaker's line. Write that between the speakers. |
| 2020-01-17 08:35:15 | Father and daughters, Daphne and Kendall | Far different plot line Congrats But I the last sec scene, you transpose the names of Daphne & Kendall. |
| 2020-01-17 18:40:59 | The Camping Trip - A Mother's Desires Series | IN paragraph #1-husband's require possessive apostrophe. |
| 2020-01-17 18:54:02 | The Camping Trip - A Mother's Desires Series | IN paragraph #1-husband's require possessive apostrophe. |
| 2020-01-20 15:35:15 | Three Little Angels: Grad Party Gossip | Too much dialogue, Too little exposition |