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Comments from TheDevilsOwn
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2021-06-05 15:55:01 | Opposites Can Attract | Sorry, I had to stop reading this story at the point where the "farm boy" murdered two people in cold blood. Unless he's done something like that in the past, the very idea of killing something would have probably had him pissing in his pants no matter what the situation. Also, you need to look at sentence structure a little better, almost every sentence you use "for he was" or "for he liked". It gets pretty annoying when you use the same thing over and over again. |
| 2021-07-27 22:04:02 | Public Pillory 3 - The proper way to treat a lady. | Great concept and the writing is pretty decent with only a few errors here and there that could be easily fixed by having a couple people beta read it for errors first. Just one problem, don't ever submit so many chapters at once, something always gets screwed up. Chapters 4 and 5 didn't post with the rest of the story so those of us that have read to the end of 3 will have to wait till the mods get through approving those two chapters. |
| 2021-07-18 12:23:04 | COME MONDAY | I can honestly say, I hope you are working on a part 2 to this story. It is well written, provocative and frankly a damn easy story to read unlike a lot of stories on this site that have such poor grammar usage, syntax and structure that they are painful to read. Yours isn't like that at all, please write a part 2! |
| 2021-07-18 12:23:37 | COME MONDAY | I can honestly say, I hope you are working on a part 2 to this story. It is well written, provocative and frankly a damn easy story to read unlike a lot of stories on this site that have such poor grammar usage, syntax and structure that they are painful to read. Yours isn't like that at all, please write a part 2! |
| 2021-07-31 01:00:01 | Public Pillory 9 - The last morning | Very good tale. On your next story, please, please, please have a few people beta read it first before posting to help you correct the errors. While the errors weren't major, they do detract from the overall outcome. |