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Comments from PABLO DIABLO
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2018-10-06 18:28:34 | The Chauffeur(#3)...... First Day/ Jill | Johnny2120.....I'm writing the next chapter currently......stay tuned! And, THANK YOU for reading my story. I appreciate the comments. |
| 2018-10-07 23:56:53 | Creating My Hot Wife 5 | Best story so far. Doesn't read like a lecture. The deions of your first swing event made it an easier jump from what you've been talking about to the actuality of it all. The swing lifestyle can be as wonderful as your first teenage love or as destructive as a shotgun to the head. But, I'm sure you already know this tidbit. |
| 2018-10-08 06:29:20 | The Chauffeur(#3)...... First Day/ Jill | Hey CountryCadillac and Johnny2120, I just sent the next story of "The Chauffeur" Series for XNXX.com to publish. Look for it to publish the next couple of days, depending of course how backed up they are from the weekend and Monday being Columbus Day. |
| 2018-10-08 23:05:47 | The Chauffeur(#4)......Tina and Those Crazy Clients | SHHHHH. Don't be trying to figure out where David and Tina are heading....ha ha. I have plans for them, so stay tuned! Again, thank you for your kind words about my writing. Don't be afraid to share my work with friends who you think would enjoy.......Paul (aka...PABLO DIABLO) |
| 2018-10-12 15:08:26 | Daughter's leftover | WOW! The basic story is ok. However, it is a tough read. Wrong verb usage, incorrect sentence tense, incoherent thoughts. Might I suggest a couple of things: Get a word program on your computer, this will help with many grammatical issues along with spelling issues. Second, read as many authors as possible...might I suggest: Mystic47, Professor_Chaos, Tina_Kerr_36, and Lubrican just to name a few. Please do not misunderstand, I encourage you to keep writing, but seeing how other authors write will only enhance your writing skills. Also, might I suggest getting a Thesaurus AND a dictionary to help improve. IF English is not your primary language, have a friend read the story (someone you can trust) that has English as their primary language. I'm not sure if this is the case, but it reads as if it is....Just some SUGGESTIONS....trying not to be too critical only helpful. |