| 2018-08-01 17:19:48 |
The Dorsett Plantation
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Really? Perhaps this is one that could be removed! |
| 2021-02-19 19:31:58 |
Kinky Kirsty 1
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I mean to be constructive. Place the dialog of the individual characters into separate paragraphs - makes for much easier reading. Check the spelling / meaning of words (don't just rely on spell checker) - site is a place or location while sight is has to do with vision. If you can try and include the feelings of the characters, both physical and emotional - that is where the ability to move the reader comes from. |
| 2021-02-19 19:38:46 |
A night of fun in the hottub
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This is unreadable. Please learn to spell out entire words, use quotation marks and paragraphs appropriately. |