| 2020-11-09 01:38:12 |
The Old Man and the Beach--Part 3
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Like life, ups & downs, joy & sadness; excited by the details of couplings & tears at Max's demise. Dialogue & paragraphs much better & easier to read. THANKS! No noticable errors thru the series, great scenario & story flow. THANKS again for posting here! |
| 2020-11-24 03:12:02 |
When Is It Too Late To Turn Back
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Where is Ch 2, when Bonnie is DPed? |
| 2020-11-09 06:30:39 |
John & Sara's Experiment
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Love it! This is what every male needs to learn about women, not dominance, but respect, cooperation. & mutual fulfilment. Most women want a partner strong, but reasonable; a leader that does what's "best for the the troops" (family as a whole). Great lesson on relationships. THANKS! |
| 2020-11-10 03:15:49 |
The Club part 2
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Agree with T vs T; good work ,great potential!. Looking forward to more in the future! Only suggestion- shorter paragraphs & dialogue as a paragraph. |
| 2020-11-10 04:45:37 |
Jakob & Jessie--The Improbable Couple
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More to cum? A chapter or more about some college fun! Good job; don't stop.write more! |