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Comments from DudeInATurtleneck
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2019-11-18 21:23:42 | Sister’s helping hand (Pt-III) | Maybe you shouldve held off on deleting the old part 2: there’s no part 2 showing up now |
| 2019-12-10 08:02:41 | Favorite Aunt - Ch. 10-13 | I enjoyed the story, mostly, and REALLY enjoyed your writing style. i wasn’t a big fan of the last chapters - I would've preferred he and his aunt staying together - but what you wrote was written well. Hope to see more of your work in the future |
| 2019-12-13 18:34:23 | Mom so Hot! Chapters 11-16 | Interesting...the first posting - initial chapters - was very good; good as stroker material (well written sex scenes), pretty good story. Although, the sex was getting repetitious, and kinda “vanilla” (not even any oral?) This second half, though, magnified those flaws...the sex continued to be vanilla, this time with TWO couples not doing any real variety of sex (again, no oral), but the STORY ITSELF was very repetitious: he watches his wife and father bang, thinks a Bit, watches them bang again...also, from a storytelling POV, it was a LARGE gap that there was no explanation for the wife and father’s behaviour; the father has a self-professed and self-evident low sex drive but is unable to keep away from Rita? Rita is crying on his shoulder about...what? It’s stated SHE’s the one withholding sex, yet seems in a better mood free she fucks her husband. WAY more information needed to be filled in on that. |
| 2019-12-13 18:42:55 | Mom so Hot! Chapters 11-16 | 2nd part of comments: In a long story, plot is of PARAMOUNT importance; we writing, even hit sex writing, will only sustain a reader so far. The story of a son and mother falling in love, the father and daughter-in-law falling in...I’d guess lust, not love, was convenient, but okay. Here, I’d say to anyone reading...do NOT read the next part. It, frankly RUINS the entire story: the sex is STILL vanilla, but now the whole basis of the story is betrayed to add more characters to the stroker aspect of it. It comes across as a bit more “rapey” to me than this part (a character is said to have “not resisted” when I think she resisted PLENTY enough), and to top it off, it doesn’t finish! Avoid, avoid! |
| 2019-12-13 18:42:57 | Mom so Hot! Chapters 11-16 | 2nd part of comments: In a long story, plot is of PARAMOUNT importance; we writing, even hit sex writing, will only sustain a reader so far. The story of a son and mother falling in love, the father and daughter-in-law falling in...I’d guess lust, not love, was convenient, but okay. Here, I’d say to anyone reading...do NOT read the next part. It, frankly RUINS the entire story: the sex is STILL vanilla, but now the whole basis of the story is betrayed to add more characters to the stroker aspect of it. It comes across as a bit more “rapey” to me than this part (a character is said to have “not resisted” when I think she resisted PLENTY enough), and to top it off, it doesn’t finish! Avoid, avoid! |