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Comments from albertofatto
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2018-11-27 23:01:41 | The Chauffeur (#10)..Making it Great Again (part one) | I was enjoying this until the gay shit |
| 2018-11-29 07:30:21 | Susan's first fling | Punctuation. Is. Important. Mate. |
| 2018-11-29 07:33:37 | Emily's bad habits | Fucking beautiful mate. Just a little thing tho "I couldn't help but cry out in pain at the rough treatment. As I did the dark piss landed directly in my mouth shooting straight down my throat as I cried out in pain." That's a wonky way to phrase, and it's all over your story. You should rephrase it like "I couldn't help but cry out in pain at the rough treatment, and as I did, the dark piss landed directly in my mouth, shooting straight down my throat." Just a friendly critique mate. |
| 2018-11-29 15:59:23 | The Chair_(4) | Good story mate. Brief but heartfelt. |
| 2018-11-29 16:00:48 | Forced to Rape My Daughter_(1) | Oh fuck that last line got me good mate. Hard enough to cut fookin diamonds |